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For 20 years I dreamed
dream upon dream. Til all seemed
forget-me-knots in packing strings,
lakeside walks and Summer flings.
I sighed [and cried]. Crossed fingers
that Autumn leaves would linger
and stave being crushed
by mitted children rushed
to play in snow.

But now I know.
That dreams are just like
spiderwebs.
Hanging in the garden of
the mind.
A breath of wind,
the dream is gone,
and emptiness is left
behind.

But solid stand the castles,
built sturdy by their masters.
With silent devotion,
stone upon stone,
till one day, love\'s throne
shelters within its walls;
smiles and laugher warm its halls.

While the dreamer sits out
cold and blind,
content in the castles
of his mind.
:iconmcivercork:
I am turning 20 tomorrow. This is a hard age for me. I see it as more of a milestone than 21 or even 50. I am leaving my teenhood behind.
This is a time to reflect for me. If you are familiar with my poetic works, or even my songs. They are usually angsty love songs. About love, or me wanting to be in love, or me being in love and wishing I wasn't, or me wanting someone to love me. You get the picture. I have spent a large portion of my life thinking and fretting and dreaming about love. I dont really know why this is. I know I watched too much Dawson's Creek, that is for sure. But I guess I was more in love with the idea of being in love. I now realise that I am in no postion to be loved by someone (romantically) or give romantic love. Love to me is something that must be worked on and cherished, it is not something which should be gained through a love poem. Or even pined about, it looks like hard work to me.
I think I am going to struggle to write love poetry from now on. I have realised alot.
This poem is mainly about me, being a dreamer, and love being a castle that take ages to build, but eventually stands solid and proud for all to see.
I have not even started building my castle, but I hope one day I will dwell in a grand tower!
Anyway thanks to all my friends and supporters on and off DevArt. It means alot to me.
I hope you like this poem. Thank you for sitting through my lecture!

Love Cork!
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~AshrafG Aug 25, 2004  Student
Nice piece friend! Well written, good use of language, great imagery!

And just to let you know from someone who turned 40 this year, the body aches, the body breaks, but the mind and soul remains in tact and whole. You are what you let yourself dream to be. Dont give up on your dreams because others tell you that have reached a marker in time. I sigh when I hear people have given up on hope or on faith, but when you give up on your dreams... that just makes me mad! Keep your dreams alive. A raging fire that can engulf a world starts life as an ember... Your job.. keep those embers burning!

Love your stuff!
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:iconspiffyman:
There seems to be a slight inconsistency between the description and the actual poem... and maybe even the poem and itself...
You say you have realized how you want to build real castles... but at the end of the poem you say that you are content with the castles in your mind...

You might have intended this paradox... I believe a dreamer is never content with merely dreaming. And it seems that the transition you went through... and the struggle you experienced during it... was that you are no longer content with just dreaming. blah... maybe I am just assuming too much.

I can relate to your struggle with dreaming... here is one of my poems that you might relate to: [link]
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:iconseatofdreams:
This is so beautiful and so insightful. The majic and dispare of revelation captued so swiftly. I cannot say how it made me feel properly.
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:iconalexandra:
contrary to popular belief, i dont think it is possible to stop being a dreamer. dreams come whether they are wanted or not. we cling to these whisps as though they are lifelines, but really, they are hope. without the dreams of love, of life, of anything, how would we look to the future?

lakeside walks and Summer flings.
I sighed [and cried]. Crossed fingers
that Autumn leaves would linger
and stave being crushed

dont you ever think that although these were some of your happiest times that there will be something happier to come? it astounds me to think of the potential for love, the capacity for joy and laughter that humans have. while there are undoubtedly going to be more forlorn moments, more tears, there will also be more smiles, and for me, that is something dream about.

i suppose i have strayed from the topic of your poem, which just adds to the point that truly amazing work inspires, which this did.

happy birthday
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:icontmciver:
I am trully disturbed by this poem. It removes foundations that I don't want removed, it moves the world of one realm and places it far away. But I suppose it does leave some hope, the Glory of the castle does leave hope, but where for the beauty of the web? it's dew soaked morning glisten? Is the web not natures most amazing structure? And what is the few hundred years of the castle next to the one perfect night of the web. I am disturbed by this poem.

This Poem effects me.
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:iconslippy:
this is wonderful. excellen flow, wonderful rhythm. i like very much!
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~-bigred- Feb 8, 2003   Writer
nice on mate. This is a very powerful and kinda sad poem. Dont be dejected about love mate, you have one solid foundation of being one fantastic person upon which to build your castle.
Meanwhile... dont stop being a dreamer... being a dreamer is a gift from God and I think that it is something that i admire in you, your ability to step outside and contemplate life from a perspective that very few people view it from.
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:iconyum64:
happy birthday! this is some of the best rhyming i've ever seen. you're very lucky to have that talent!
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~rainey Feb 8, 2003   Writer
i always thought turning 20 was a good thing. it's just a number anyway. you work nicely with rhyme, most people don't.
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:iconthree-oh-three:
Oh man! That thing just hit me powerfully... It's amazing how God can use people to speak to each other in ways like this, even when they don't realize it! So relevant to me atm too...

Wonderfully written... +fav!
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